Are Pictures Ruining Our Lives?
Over the summer I went to a concert with my friend. We were very focused on trying to make sure we had photos and videos, but both of our phones died. We still didn’t learn our lesson. We went and took her sister’s phone and used all of her battery. Now, looking back, we do not remember the concert clearly just bits and pieces. Constantly capturing one’s life is causing people to miss out on experiences, form incomplete memories, and annoy others.
Endlessly capturing life is resulting in people missing out on experiences like concerts and scenic views. Concert tickets are expensive. People spend their money to enjoy the music of an artist they like; however, they are wasting money because they spend most of the concert videotaping songs or taking pictures. People are too focused on trying to remember their experience through videos, rather than enjoying the moment and looking back at the memories. People also are trying to capture once in a lifetime experiences on video, missing out on the real view. After the encounter is gone all they have is a poor quality video.
Because people are constantly taking pictures while doing activities, they don’t remember their experiences as well. While phones and cameras have a quality for capturing circumstances such as a family photo, they depict views poorly. When people encounter a gorgeous view their first reaction is to snap a picture of it, rather than take in and enjoy the view. Later if asked how beautiful it was they will pull out their phone and show the half decent picture they took. If asked to explain the scene or tell how magnificent it was people are not able to explain the full beauty of the view because instead of enjoying the outlook, they tried to capture it resulting in a poor recollection of the experience.
When out for a meal people expect to talk and enjoy the time together. Today people are texting, emailing, and updating social media all to avoid interacting with other people. When waiters bring the food ordered the general thing to do is to eat the meals. However, people seem to pull out their cell phones and Instagram or Snapchat a picture of their meal before taking the first bite. Not only does this waste time trying to get good lighting, cause the food to cool, but most obnoxiously it annoys the people you are dining with. The definition of annoying is irritatingly bothersome. When someone pulls out their phone during a meal a majority of people feel this emotion causing them to become distant, rude, or cold towards the other person for the remainder of the meal.
People may argue videos help to look back on old concerts, and blurry pictures are better than never seeing the event again. A few people may even say it’s enjoyable when Twitter is full of people’s lunches; however, that is mostly not the case. In a survey done by the New York Times more than 60% of people say they could not remember life experiences because they were trying to acquire the perfect picture to post on social media.
Everyone knows the aggravating moment when out at dinner with someone whose first reaction when handed their meal is to take a picture of it. Imagine being at a concert where the audience is focused on the artist singing instead of being focused on their phone and assuring they have the perfect angle. Regularly taking pictures is forcing people to not recall and miss out on experiences, along with annoying others.
I agree that to many pictures and videos are ruining our life experiences. We should spend less time with our devices and more making connections and memories.
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Thank you for your take on my essay I am thankful I am not the only one who feels this way! Was there any thing I could improve on?
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Using a real life experience was a good way to hook your readers in your opening statement. Your article was based off of pathos mainly which is great for appealing to emotion, but try adding some logos to have some proof behind your statements. Very interesting topic and great take on it! Kendall M -OHS
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Thank you for giving me your thoughts toward my essay. It is helpful to know what I can improve on and what I am good at.
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I like how you used an experience it was a very good detail. You have a good use of pathos because of of the details you used and the personal story. Try to use more logos to have some more evidence. Overall its good!
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Thanks for your input Quincy I appreciate it;however, it might be useful to learn how to use more logos within my essay. How could I improve on it, how could I fit it in, or what does it add to the story?
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Your use of an anecdote was the perfect way to start your essay, as it created a more personal tone for the rest of the piece. Try to avoid using contractions (don’t, won’t, etc.) as to help your style feel more mature. There was a minimal amount of grammatical errors (such as commas misplaced), but those small details did not take away from the compelling argument you developed. I enjoyed the essay, as it is fresh and new from what others argue against or for.
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I liked how you incorporated your own and the reader’s personal experiences to make the claim more relatable. Providing examples of how the reader would feel in a specific situation really helped connect the reader to you argument. The only thing I would change is I would add commas in a lot of your longer sentences, when appropriate, to help the reader understand its meaning more. Otherwise, I thought this was really well written and makes a point that is definitely unique among people these days.
-Emily (RL)
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